there are things forgotten, like the sound of the floorboards and the smell of the smoke and the soap on your skin. there are things you miss— simplicity, evergreen and evergrowing, always knowing exactly what will happen next. there are two things you must know, must hold at once: you are alone and you are whole, two things that fight the pulling of the undertow, the control you once had but now lack, you fear you may crack, crumble, tumble down the other side of the mountains you climbed once upon a time, your clear mind now clouded, disgraced, red faced and stubborn by design, unwinding the pieces you left behind out of sheer spite, if nothing else.
you know the entrances and exits, the safety in emptiness, the nest you’ve spent so much of your time weaving, believing you’d never leave it again. you memorized the lock on the door, so sure, you swore it, forever and evermore. you chip away each day, trimming the decaying limbs, digging up your roots, whittling down your wits to fit into small spaces, the places you’ve long since outgrown, gazing out that tiny window, hiding from your own shadow, afraid to be known, though you still wonder if maybe somewhere out there, there could be more, more, more than these four walls and this stone floor, all-knowing furniture that is always keeping watch, always keeping score. you wonder if maybe one day there will be nothing left to atone for.
Duly, I have to say this is one of the most relatable pieces of writing I’ve ever read. People tend to fear change because it represents “the unknowing,” and the safety they have built around their current lives may feel unreachable once that line is crossed. I love the analogy you made with the nest, “the nest you’ve spent so much of your time weaving, believing you’d never leave it again” because it perfectly captures what it feels like to invest so much of yourself into something you love, only to realize you may have outgrown it. The line “the control you once had but now lack, you fear you may crack, crumble, tumble down the other side of the mountains you climbed once upon a time” also resonated deeply with me, as it reflects the fear of losing stability when stepping into the unknown. That fear often traps us in a comfort zone, clinging to things that no longer serve a purpose. Finally, the final sentence, “you wonder if maybe one day there will be nothing left to atone for” stayed with me, as it beautifully suggests that growth sometimes requires letting go and accepting when it’s time to move on to the next chapter of your life.
Personally, I am a game developer, mod creator, and server host. Your writing brought me a nostalgic feeling about the projects I truly miss. The long nights of collaboration, the challenges that came along the way, and the satisfaction of creating something I once believed was perfect. It reminded me that even the things we build with passion eventually reach a point where we must move on, not out of loss, but to make space for what’s next.
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Hello,
This poem really resonated with me. It struck me as very reflective with lines like “the control you once had but lack, you fear you may crack, crumble”, showing the anxiety that is inevitable with
To me this poem represents the difficulty of growth.
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Duly,
I found this poem very relatable, but also intriguing. The way you are able to capture the gripping tension between both isolation and self-acceptance feels like a universal experience. It made me reflect on parts of my life balancing the two and how I still find myself clinging to the parts of myself that I’ve “outgrown” whether for habit or fear. The imagery of transformation and confinement you use shows how growth tends to happen in quiet or uncomfortable spaces.
The line that sticks out to me the most was “you are alone and you are whole” it got me to read through the whole poem. The overall simplicity of the statement is what makes it hit so hard. It’s not softened by words or dressed up to be more than it is, it’s just a cold fact. It almost feels contradictory to read it, it brings the themes of contradiction and coexistence that is in the whole poem.
The sentences flow from beginning to end, unpunctuated in rhythmic like an unravelling memory. This gives the poem a great sense of motion, like we’re reliving this memory.
Thank you for sharing this piece, it is hauntingly, profoundly human
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